SOME INDIVIDUALS SAY THAT INDIVIDUALS WHO MAKE A LOT OF MONEY ARE THE MOST SUCCESSFUL. OTHERS THINK THAT THOSE WHO CONTRIBUTE TO SOCIETY LIKE SCIENTISTS AND TEACHERS ARE MORE SUCCESSFUL. DISCUSS BOTH THE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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I strongly believe that

this

academy is best suited for me because

this

educational institution has provided the world’s best education.

This

academy received National awards for teaching excellence and

Collaborative

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a Collaborative

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Award for Teaching Excellence. Even though, all the information provided on the educational institution's website is very clear everyone can understand it very easily.

Additionally

this

university provides various facilities like Atrium Café, Starbucks, Wild Kitchen, The Coffee Pod and

variety

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a variety

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of foods. University mainly

focus

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focuses

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Accomodation

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accommodation

, Campus and Facilities, Preparing and arrival, Sports, societies and activities, Health and wellbeing, and many more.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

95 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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