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Disruptive school students have negative impact on their classmates. Students are noisy and disobident should be grouped together and teaching separately. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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Disruptive
students
 are always dangerous to their classmates. The prompt notes that destructive school
students
 have a detrimental effect on others, and it
also
 recommends that scholars who are naughty and do not obey the teacher's rules should have separate groups for teaching the subjects. I,
however
, agree with the first view and disagree with the second view.
This
 essay will provide logical reasons for both views before drawing a conclusion
accordingly
.   On the one hand, I would argue that disruptive school
students
 have a negative influence on others, and by
this
, I mean to say that they have a criminal mindset and poor concentration power, which creates a bad environment in the study place.
While
 it reduces other
students
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 capabilities to do well in their examinations, they
also
 have an influence on others, creating negative habits like smoking, drug addiction, etc.
For example
,
students
 with a destructive mindset often spoil good scholars through discussion with unnecessary topics rather than studies.  
On the other hand
, there is little evidence to support the view that
students
 who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. To be more precise,
this
 is not possible because teachers should have a separate class for them and another class for other
students
, which is
also
 considered a waste of time. Apart from that,
this
 creates huge discrimination between both groups.
For example
, when there is a separate batch of
students
 in their school, it always creates a burden for teachers, and
students
 feel discrimination between them.  
To conclude
, based on the foregoing discussion, despite the fact that descriptive scholars have many drawbacks towards their classmates, it is not easy for teachers to have different classes for them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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