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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

#internet #newspapers
Technology has become a key part of our daily routine. It is an aspect that covers the use of the internet. There is a general concern that
newspapers
 may fade away with the increasing use of Internet services. I partly disagree with
this
 notion. On the one hand,
people
 from all over the world are turning to online platforms for
information
.
For instance
, it has become common for us all to read news from our mobile devices
while
 performing other tasks. Even without searching for a particular
information
, internet users are constantly bombarded with news headlines from all over the world. It generates the reader's interest to know more which makes them access these. It is clear from
this
 illustration that without effort,
people
 get access to free
information
 about current happenings.
Therefore
, I agree individuals may not find the need to spend extra cash to purchase
newspapers
 for
information
 they have already read.
On the other hand
, our society still has and will continue to have conservative
people
 who delight in using hard copies. To illustrate
this
, I will use my father. He is very comfortable reading from
newspapers
 and underlining important
information
 with a pen. In his opinion, the media houses may twist the
information
 of the writer so he likes to see the original for himself. It is evident
then
 that there will be
people
 who will continue to hold onto the old ways of doing things.
Hence
, I disagree with
such
people
 ,
newspapers
 will be termed history in the future. In conclusion,
although
 acquiring
information
 online is rampant in our modern world, I partly disagree that in some years to come,
this
 trend will completely take the place of
newspapers
.
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task achievement
Provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction to clearly state your position.
task achievement
Develop your supporting points and examples further to increase clarity and provide more in-depth reasoning.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single main idea.
coherence cohesion
In the conclusion, summarize your main points and restate your position clearly.
lexical resource
Use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to demonstrate a wide range of language.
grammatical range accuracy
Pay closer attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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