Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

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offline is the traditional
way
to acquire knowledge
in
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at
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the
university
. But in the present age, especially after
he
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the
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Covid 19 epidemic,
learn
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learning
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by traditional
method
is no longer possible for
students
.
Therefore
,
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the Online
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learning
method
happened to help
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students
keep up
their
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with their
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courses with
university
progress, which is
also
a good
way
to improve
education
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the education
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system in
university
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universities
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.
Firstly
, online
course
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courses
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make
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give
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education
to a wider range of people, including those who cannot attend traditional classes
due to
geographic restrictions.
Addtionally
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Additionally
,
students
can be allowed to
study
on their schedule when learning online.
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, cost savings are factors that help
students
balance their finances when studying online.
According to
statistics of the
University
economics and
finace
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finance
for the quality of online learning in 2021. Over 50%
students
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of students
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choose the online
method
instead
of the traditional
way
because of the
costs
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cost
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savings. But not every technique is perfect. On the
down
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other
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hand, using
online
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the online
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method
lacks
of
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interaction and immediate feedback, which can lead to feelings of isolation and hinder social
development
.
Along with
that, not every
students
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student
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have the ability to
study
online, they need good
self – discipline
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self–discipline
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to be able to
study
well in
this
onlinve
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online
environment. In conclusion, having a new
way
to learn in
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epidemic when people cannot
going
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go
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out
beside
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of
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their
house
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is a good
development
in
education
. But whether online courses are positive or negative
development
also
depends on the environment and the circumstances. It can
increased
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the range
also
reduce the costs, which is a good
way
,
however
, it
also
have
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has
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the challenge to the quality and the quality interaction for
students
. In
summary
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the combination between the traditional
method
and the online technique would make the best
development
in
education
.
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