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Some people argue that technological invention such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive.Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many people believe that children should learn a second language from a young age. Do you agree with this view, and what are some potential benefits and challenges of early language acquisition?

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Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced

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