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Some people argue that technological invention such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive.Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

You recently attented a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home you found you had left some vital papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager or the hotel. -Explain the problem. -Say why the documents are vital . - Suggest a solution.

Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative atibe impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have a little effect on public health, and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.