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Task 1: The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Task 1: The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.

Task 1: The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Task 1: The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.
#chocolate
The
pictoral
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pictorial
 flow depicts
steps
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the steps
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 required to produce
a chocolate
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chocolate
a bar of chocolate
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.
Overall
, there are six methods needed to harvest and deliver
cocoa
beans
 and
additional
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an additional
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 four stages to process them into the final product in the factory. Focusing on the harvesting phase, most
cocoa
 trees are cultivated in America, Africa, and Indonesia. Only the ripe red pods
which
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apply
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are eligible to be harvested because of the quality of
cocoa
beans
 they
innate
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are innate
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.
Thereafer
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Therefore
, picked
beans
 are fermented and diversified in
sun
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the sun
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 to dry. Those dried
beans
then
 are collected in large sacks to be delivered by train or lorry to the manufacturing site. After being taken to
factory
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the factory
a factory
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,
beans
 are roasted
in
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at
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 a very high temperature at the roastery site.
Next,
the roasted
beans
 are crushed to remove their outer shells.
Finally
, the extraction of the chocolate liquid is performed by pressing those
cocoa
beans
 inner part.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cocoa, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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