Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because univerity education only benefit the students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people

thought

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that students in higher education should pay all the cost of studies because it only develops personal skills and does not have any input to

society

. I

totaly

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totally

disagree with the view because if

society

want

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to develop

themselves

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itself

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they

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need

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needs

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highly educated people in

science

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the science

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and technology field. On the one hand, nowadays every country facing

with

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apply

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serious challenges

such

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pandemics,

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the effect

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effect

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effects

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climate

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the climate

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crisis, and agricultural

product's

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shortage

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. Only

collabrative

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collaborative

works

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between scientists could solve those problems because they are to much complex.

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, with the

last

pandemic all the world

try

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to find a way to battle

with Corona virus

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the coronavirus,

but only

german

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scientists

succeed

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with

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the

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apply

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producing

vaccine

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a vaccine

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and

make

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it feasible to produce. Because

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it is not only about biology

also

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consists

different

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of different

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sub-problems from production in high titer to stable transformation without degradation.

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country's

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the country's

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economies

driven

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by high-tech companies that

focuses

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on software, robotics and synthetic biology. They have high

reveneu

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revenue

potential and

this

bring

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brings

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them with paying high taxes to

government

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the government

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. In

this

way, the

goverments

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government

governments

could make more investment

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important areas that

benefits

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benefit

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all

society

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of society

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such

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health and education.

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, San Francisco has little land area when

compare

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with other locations but it's

generate

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reveneu

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revenue

than other countries because of the slicon

valley

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that

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the

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biggest software companies located

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. In conclusion,

society

needs educated people that have important skills in science and engineering

are

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This

only

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way

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for to

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countries move forward and bring

society

better

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a better

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place.

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260 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because univerity education only benefit the students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

(Sofia) In many countries students’ concentration in the classroom has decreased. What are the reasons for this? What are some possible solutions? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In modern society, many people think that primary schools should teach science and technology rather than history and geography which are useless and boring. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?