Some people believe that university students should pay all the cost of studies because univerity education only benefit the students themselves not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people
thought
that students in higher education should pay all the cost of studies because it only develops personal skills and does not have any input to Wrong verb form
think
society
. I totaly
disagree with the view because if Correct your spelling
totally
society
want
to develop Change the verb form
wants
themselves
, Correct pronoun usage
itself
they
Correct pronoun usage
it
need
highly educated people in Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
science
and technology field.
On the one hand, nowadays every country facing Correct article usage
the science
with
serious challenges Change preposition
apply
such
as,
pandemics, Remove the comma
apply
Add an article
the effect
effect
of Fix the agreement mistake
effects
climate
crisis, and agricultural Add an article
the climate
product's
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product
shortage
. Only Fix the agreement mistake
shortages
collabrative
Correct your spelling
collaborative
works
between scientists could solve those problems because they are to much complex. Fix the agreement mistake
work
For example
, with the last
pandemic all the world try
to find a way to battle Wrong verb form
tried
with Corona virus
but only Correct your spelling
the coronavirus,
german
scientists Capitalize word
German
succeed
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succeeded
with
Change preposition
in
the
producing Correct article usage
apply
vaccine
and Correct article usage
a vaccine
make
it feasible to produce. BecauseWrong verb form
making
,
it is not only about biology Remove the comma
apply
also
it
consists Correct pronoun usage
apply
different
sub-problems from production in high titer to stable transformation without degradation.
Change preposition
of different
On the other hand
, country's
economies Correct article usage
the country's
driven
by high-tech companies that Add a missing verb
are driven
focuses
on software, robotics and synthetic biology. They have high Change the verb form
focus
reveneu
potential and Correct your spelling
revenue
this
bring
them with paying high taxes to Change the verb form
brings
government
. In Add an article
the government
this
way, the goverments
could make more investment Correct your spelling
government
governments
to
important areas that Change preposition
in
benefits
all Change the verb form
benefit
society
Change preposition
of society
such
as,
health and education. Remove the comma
apply
For example
, San Francisco has little land area when compare
with other locations but it's Change the form of the verb
compared
generate
more Correct subject-verb agreement
generates
reveneu
than other countries because of the slicon Correct your spelling
revenue
valley
Capitalize word
Valley
that
biggest software companies locatedCorrect determiner usage
the
in
.
In conclusion, Change preposition
apply
society
needs educated people that have important skills in science and engineering are
. Unnecessary verb
apply
This
is only
way Add an article
the only
to
countries move forward and bring Change preposition
for to
society
to better
place.Correct article usage
a better
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task achievement
Provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction to clearly state your position.
coherence cohesion
Improve the organization of your ideas by using paragraphs to separate your main points.
task achievement
Expand on your arguments and provide more supporting details.
lexical resource
Use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary.
grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve accuracy.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite