As the result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having negative effect on their health.

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These days more and more people using contemporary technologies. By reason of technological inventions
such
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as the computer and television,
lack
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the lack
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of physical activities and it have been impacting
on
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an
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individual's health. I
am partially agree
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with
this
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statement using electronic devices can be harmful,
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however
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however,
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it has some advantages
also
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.
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,
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of
cutting edge
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technologies
have
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benefits. One major advantage of that it could give opportunities to the young generation.
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, especially for techies people.
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is because they
glued
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to the screens. Their
work
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full of these technological things. It may help them to develop different skills. Apart from that it can be beneficial for some citizens in order to have fun.
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, watching TV with friends or relatives is very enjoyable and unforgettable. What I mean to say is there might be a heated debate between friends or with cousins.
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, there
are
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myriad
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of drawbacks. First and foremost, nowadays teenagers are addicted to gadgets.
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means it might lead to
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of sleep or other health problems. In spite of the fact that
,
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they
used
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to smartphones and
laptop
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. So that they have problems with their eyes or they may suffer from insomnia. As
the
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a
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result
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result,
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they are not able to get into full gear.
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Also
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it can have
influence
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an influence
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on their friendships or maybe
relationship
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. Because they will ignore the people who live or stay around them. It will cause many issues.
To sum up
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,
while
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technology has had both desirable and negative effects, I believe that it has the potential to bring about overwhelmingly negative effects.
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