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The recent popularity of online shopping will result in the end of high street shops. To what extend do you agree and disagree?

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Nowadays, the preference for online shopping will close down the local shops. I totally disagree with the perspective and my justification will be provided in
further
 paragraphs. To commence with, there are several reasons why people still buy from street shops even though online shopping is popular.
Firstly
, when individuals go to a shop they can check the quality of the
product
 and material by themselves.
Secondly
, they can try on the clothes and see if look good on them or not.
Additionally
, if they have any size issue
then
 the shopkeeper can fix that immediately.
For instance
, he can call a tailor to fit the cloth
according to
 the buyer's size or another size.
Thirdly
, when a
product
 is bought we get it at that time only: we don't need to wait for 2-3 days to receive it.
Furthermore
, there is no chance of fraud in offline shopping because a customer checks the
product
 before buying.
Moreover
, when the price of a commodity is high consumers can bargain with the shopkeeper and get it at a reasonable price.
On the contrary
, shopping online has several benefits including many discounts.
Apart from
this
, it is available 24x7 which lets the shopper buy in their own leisure time.
Additionally
, a wide range of collections is provided on websites.
In addition
 to that, the consumers can compare prices of the same
product
 sold by different websites and select the
product
 available at the lowest price. To give an overview, there are various pros of online shopping
however
 it cannot replace street shopping as a quality check, fitting and immediate obtainable can be accessed only through it.
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