Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
A section of society believes that an international
car-free
day
will be a more effective solution to decrease air
pollution
, however
, I agree with the latter view of applying effective ideas to do so. This
essay will discuss both views.
The main source of pollution
is fuel generated by vehicles
, however
, this
essay disagrees that car pollution
is the only reason for air
pollution
. There are various factors which hammer air
contamination. Car pollution
is like a drop in the ocean and having a car-free
day
is not going to show a big impact as the cars back on the roads will generate the polluted air
again. This
is not a long-term solution and will not be helpful to the community. For example
, as per the Oxford University survey conducted in 2017 in London showed that only 5% of pollution
was reduced in London on a car-free
day
.
There are many alternate ways to control air
pollution
, to name a few uses of public transport, eco-friendly vehicles
and planting more trees. The use of electronic and eco-friendly vehicles
will reduce the contamination of air
for a long time. For instance
, according to
the New York Times in 2018, citizens of Hungary have switched their use of vehicles
by making more use of eco-friendly cars and commuting by public transport. This
has tremendously reduced the air
pollution
in their country by almost 60%.
To conclude
, a car-free
day
is a short-term solution however
switching to eco-friendly products will show the long-term results and will be beneficial to us and our surroundings.Submitted by deepalivaz on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and the writer's stance on the issue. Also, provide a concluding summary in the conclusion.
task achievement
The response addresses the task to a sufficient extent. However, it would be beneficial to develop the ideas more fully and provide a more balanced discussion of both views.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite