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The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016
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The given graph illustrates the average number of four
clinics'
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patients
 per week between 2010 and 2016.
Overall
, all of the weekly
patients
' numbers
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 throughout the given period of time. In
first
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 half of the period, the statistics of
patients
 who use birth control was the highest,
whereas
 in
other
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the other
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 half of the
period
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 eye
patients
 had
the
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an
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 upward tendency. The line of birth control
patients
 fluctuated
among
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over
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 the
years
, the changes were marginal(no more than 100 each time).
Patients
 who struggled with eyes
,
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 slightly increased from 2010 to 2012, but after 2012 it considerably escalated and reached the highest point in 2016. The amount of diabetic individuals who visited a hospital minimally climbed
for
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 about 30
patients
,
while
 the average number of diabetics remained stable during the
years
 2012 and 2014.
Then
 it rose significantly. The number of dental
patients
 differed from
years
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year
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 to
years
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year
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 and
hitted
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hit
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 the highest point at 130 in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words patients, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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