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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided illustration displays the floor map of a public
library
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 now and 20 years ago.
Overall
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, the
library
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changes
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has changed
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 a lot and a cafe is introduced over the given period.
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, the entrance area remained the same. Tables and chairs are removed from the centre of the
library
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. A cafe is developed in the south-east corner of it and an enquiry desk which was present
at
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in
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 the south-east shifted to the east of the
library
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 in between the self-service machines and adult fiction
books
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 sections.
Following
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this
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,
children's
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the children's
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books
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room
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converted
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was converted
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 into
lecture
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a lecture
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room
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. From the entrance to the
left
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left,
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 there was a reading
room
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 20 years ago which
replaced
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was replaced
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 into
computer
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the computer
a computer
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room
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. The west side of the
library
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 now
have
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has
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 a reference
books
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 portion. There was a computer games
room
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in
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on
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 the north-west side of the
library
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 which
converted
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was converted
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 into
Storytelling
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a Storytelling
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 events
room
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 and
sofa
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a sofa
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placed
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was placed
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 in that
room
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 for comfortable sitting for
audience
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the audience
an audience
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. In
this
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room
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room,
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 Children's fiction
books
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 section
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also
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was also
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 added for the
children's
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children
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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