The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.
The given charts demonstrate the
number
of people
affected by four types of noise pollution
day and night in urban and suburban areas
in 2007.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that most people
affected
by traffic in both types of Add a missing verb
were affected
areas
in 2007. However
, Industry pollution
didn't have an impact on people
during the year.
As the people
who affected
by traffic Add a missing verb
were affected
pollution
accounted for 60 in cities, this
number
was 48 in rural areas
. Nevertheless
, other types of noise pollution
didn't have an impact on people
during the year.
The rate of train pollution
comprising by
nearly 20 and 18 Wrong verb form
comprises
people
in urban and suburban areas
. There was a decrease the
Change preposition
in the
number
of aircraft pollution
in urban areas
compared with the statistics of rural areas
approximately 2 people
.
The population that was affected by traffic increased almost
12 Change preposition
by almost
people
in daytime
. Since the Add an article
the daytime
number
of train pollution
accounted for around 9 people
in daytime
, the rate of nighttime was 6.Add an article
the daytime
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