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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Sri, Hey man, What’s up? I hope you are sound and healthy. It’s been very long since I heard from you. I am very glad that you asked for advice on camping.
Firstly
,
this
 is going to be the most mesmerizing camping experience you will ever have. I know you are a beach person but trust me the breathtaking views, sceneries and beautiful sky are worth it. You will definitely enjoy the roping of tents, making new friends, and having a campfire every day will be awesome moments.
Although
, remember that
due to
 long treks and more inclined climbing, your body will become tired and sore. So, make sure you will carry enough food supplements and water for the trek.
Last
 but not least, please carry some bug spray and insect repellents as the nights will be a little irritating.
While
 I am talking about all these it made me recollect all my camping memories, so can you just drop me the details. So, I will be ready to join you guys on the camping. Hope,
this
 is enough for you to take a decision. Without any setbacks, go for it, because it's worth the tiredness. Thanks for reaching me, see you soon. Yours lovingly, Satya
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coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
coherence cohesion
Improve the greeting and closing of the letter. Use a more formal and appropriate tone for an IELTS letter.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and details to support your points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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