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You are going on a short training course at a college in Sydney, Australia. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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Dear Sir and Madam, I am writing
this
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 email regarding my upcoming training
course
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 at your college in Sydney, Australia. I will
be arrive
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 there before the
course
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 starts to attend the audio engineering
course
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 which will
between
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be between
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 the 10th of October and the 30th of October. I am hoping you could assist me or recommend an accommodation for my study period. As an international student, I am not familiar with the place and the area in Sydney, I would appreciate that if you could find a private room for me, I am happy to live with either
local
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 or different nationalities people which is a
share
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 house would be a perfect option for me. In the room, if the space could include a bed, study desk, and internet connection that would be ideal for the rest of my study time. The time that I need for a room would be ideally before the
course
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 start which will be the 8th of October. I
also
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 like to rent
another
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for another
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 month when my
course
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 ends to explore the city. So if the owner or an agency could offer me the extra month to rent it that would be much appreciated
it
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apply
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. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, MJ

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task achievement
Provide more specific details about your situation, such as your budget or any particular preferences you have.
coherence cohesion
Consider using a more formal greeting and closing, such as 'Dear Accommodation Officer' and 'Yours sincerely'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
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