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People living in the twenty-first century have a better quality of life that people who lived in previous centuries.

#people #century #quality #life #centuries
I don't agree with the given statement that
people
 living
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better
life
 in
twenty-first
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the twenty-first
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 century
then
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than
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 previous century
people
. I think
people
 who lived in previous centuries had more
quality
 of
life
then
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than
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 today's generation.
Quality
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The quality
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living
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 of any person depends upon so many factors like environment, surrounding
people
, and
food
 consumption.
People
lived
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who lived
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 in
last
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the last
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 decades had
best
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the best
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 and fresh environment and nature,
surrounding
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the surrounding
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people
 and friends were kind, and the
food
quality
 was higher.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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people
 living on
this
 earth
facing
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 so many problems related to
environment
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environmental
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 pollution which has
decline
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quality
 of
life
. Surrounding and friends
are became
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 selfish to each other, and At
the
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last
, there is
extreme
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an extreme
the extreme
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decline
 in the
food
quality
. Real pure foods are replaced by chemical and processed
food
 which does not give much energy to
human
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the human
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 body. These are some of
major
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the major
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 factors for
decline
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the decline
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 in
quality
 of
life
 in
toady's
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today's
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 generation. Another major cause for
decline
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the decline
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 in human
quality
 of
life
 is less physical activity. Now most
of
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the
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apply
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people
 do work
infront
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in front
 of laptops and computers and they
does
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do
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 not do any physical activity which
made
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makes
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people
 not lazy but
also
 unhealthy. In
nutshell
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,
people
 living twenty-first century
does
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do
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 not have a better
quality
 of
life
then
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than
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people
 who lived in previous centuries.
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