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some belive that best way to improve road safty in to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motobike. to what extend do you agree or disagree.

#belive #road #safty #age #cars #motobike
road
safty
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safety
 may depend on personal talent and skills for driving and how drivers respect
to
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road
 rules ,manners and signals , even if
age
 may be one course for
safty
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safe
 driving ,
sothat
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so that
 I somewhat agree with that statement. when
people
 are with good talent , skills and much interest
to drive
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in driving
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, they are able to
driving
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drive
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 everywhere with
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the protectino
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protectino
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protection
 of others. as
an
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example, when mid
age
people
 who drive vehicles
such
 as cars and
motobike
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motorbikes
motorbike
also
had faced
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face
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road
 traffic accidents
due to
 unsafe fast and
unexperiance
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inexperience
driving,so that
i
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I
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 must
rejected
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 that
age
 restriction used to protect
road
safty
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safety
. Allmost all
people
 tend to drive vehicles
under
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at
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 notizable speed
wiht
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with
 good command during
ride
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the ride
a ride
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, it mostly help to prevent
road
safty
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safety
 and pedastrians
therefore
, everyone
were
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is
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 able to understand security rules ,
road
 signals and commands which are
establised
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established
 by
government
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the government
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 make good rider than
age
. Despite
of
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that,
age
also
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 one remarkable point to
give
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 permission
for driving
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to drive
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 to
people
 who
lived
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 in society.
as
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 an example,children are
anable
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unable
 to ride cars and
motobike
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motobikes
 under
road
 rules
due to
lack
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a lack
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of knowldge
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knowldge
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knowledge
,
experiance
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experience
 and careless driving.
Eventhough
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Even though
,
gorvenment
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government
 might be willing to apply another
mesurment
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measurement
 to evaluate safe riders apart from
age
 will be a responsible method to develop
road
safty
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safety
. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
people
 who have skills, good
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manners
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manner
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manners
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,
knowldge
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knowledge
 and matching
age
 ,
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which
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will
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be
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help to improve
road
safty
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safety
 including pedestrians and vehicles
according to
 my perception,
sothat
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so that
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I
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i
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I
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 somewhat agree with that rule.
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