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Some scientists believe that intelligent life forms may exist on other planets and some want to send messages to contact them. Others think it is a bad idea because these life forms may be too dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Although
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 some adventurous scientists suggest using a radio telescope to beam a message and potentially establish communication with intelligent
life
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elsewhere
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 in the universe, I firmly disagree with
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 notion
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 its inherent risks. The idea of reaching out to extraterrestrial intelligent
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 has its appeal, primarily for two compelling reasons.
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, it offers the prospect of addressing pressing issues that humanity faces on Earth. Problems like global warming, energy shortages, and nuclear pollution could potentially be solved or mitigated with the assistance of more advanced extraterrestrial civilizations.
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, it satisfies a profound emotional need. The discovery of intelligent
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 beyond our planet would alleviate the profound sense of cosmic loneliness, reassuring us that we are not isolated in the vastness of the cosmos.
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, my firm stance is aligned with those who argue against attempting to make
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 with intelligent
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 on other planets, owing to the significant risks involved. The intentions and nature of any potential alien civilization are entirely unknown. Initiating
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 might inadvertently draw attention to our planet, with unforeseeable and potentially detrimental consequences. There is
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 the unsettling possibility that,
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 of benevolence, an advanced alien species might view Earth as a resource-rich target for colonization or exploitation, endangering humanity.
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 concern is echoed by renowned physicist Stephen Hawking, who cautioned against sending messages to
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 extraterrestrial beings. In the interest of human well-being and safety, any attempts to reach out to alien
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 should be avoided. In conclusion,
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 the prospect of making
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 with intelligent
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 on other planets is tantalizing, the potential risks far outweigh the potential benefits. I firmly contend that we should refrain from transmitting messages to
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 them.
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