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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Living in a different
country
 rather than your
motherhood
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country
 may cause plenty of
linguistics
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linguistic
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problems
such
 as social,practical and other communicative
problems
 but all of these
problems
 are not permanent ones and these ones may relate to different factors of foreign countries that will be mentioned in
following
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 paragraphs. From thousands of years of human societies' experiences, languages are the first and most important matter for communication and right now modern societies are in the most independent position to
language
 as the best way to communicate around different parts of the world.
Therefore
 nowadays if you want to live in a different
country
 rather than your native one you have to know their
language
 and
this
 is why, For the mentioned reason,
language
 is the fastest and easiest way to have healthy and efficient human interactions all over the world.
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 war in Ukraine made millions of people leave their
country
 and immigrate to nearby countries like Poland and
this
 sudden immigration rate has created different
problems
 for both Ukrainian and Polish people because they can not communicate with each other perfectly. There are other aspects when you
arrivein
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arrive in
arrive
adistant
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a distant
distant
country
 and you don't know their
language
 rather than social
problems
 like you may feel frightened and may lose your money because you can't ask about the best way to live but in
writer's
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the writer's
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 point of view social problem are as much as important rather than practical and other
problems
. In conclusion, humans mostly interact with languages and when you want to experience living in an abroad
country
in
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a
writer's
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 idea the first and most important thing for preventing
a
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different kinds of practical and communicative
problems
 is you must learn the foreign
country
's
language
 perfectly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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