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It is important to be concerned about international events, even if those events have no direct impact on our lives. To what degree do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#events #impact #lives
Globalisation tightens countries around the
world
,
in other words
, a change that happens in one region, political or environmental, could affect many other areas.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
such
 opinions for being aware of international
events
, regardless there is a direct
impact
 or not. First of all, some activities that commentary considered as domestic
events
 could profoundly
impact
 the
world
,
such
 as the election of presidents in a nation. Take the USA as an example, it is a powerful country in a leading position in the
world
, and the perspective of its leader could affect the
world
 in various aspects, including economics and relationships between nations.
That is
 to say, even
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if foreigners
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foreigners
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if foreigners
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 are not able to be involved in the elections in the USA, it is necessary for them to follow up on the event.
Secondly
, natural catastrophes,
such
 as earthquakes; floods;
drought
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droughts
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; and typhoons, could derive an
impact
 beyond the region
that is
 directly affected by
events
 as
such
due to
 a close supply chain in the
world
,
For instance
, the drought in Africa prompted a decrease in production of cocoa, which affect the price of associated products. In that case, individuals could notice the change in price in the future based on current
events
 happening in other places. To summarise, it is inevitable that globalisation provokes incremental influence between each country, regardless of human activities or changes in natural environments, it could affect the rest of the
world
, in my perspective, people should be more aware of news in the
world
 even if it has no direct
impact
 to one's life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concerned
  • international events
  • direct impact
  • awareness
  • global understanding
  • empathy
  • indirect impacts
  • informed
  • global issues
  • contribute
  • solutions
  • ignorance
  • narrow-mindedness
  • cultural insensitivity
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