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Some people believe that products on animals should be banned, but others think that it is necessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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animals
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 are crucial to the world and very important to our nature.
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 it is commonly had to belief that, we should stop using
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 an argument that it is for developing and producing new medicines in the future.
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, the ratio of used
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 in the testing process has increased throughout
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,
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 will decrease their life and lead to global issues
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 as the lack of protein for society.
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, as we live together and banding hunting any kind of
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 affects us whether
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 we notice it now or in the future.
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 possible to say that, we could see a huge improvement in our health after producing and tasting so many chemicals before giving them to our pets.
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, so many
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 have nearly the same natural genes as humans and
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 gives doctors more encouragement to explore more helpful medicines for us.
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, mice and monkeys are
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 in any testing process and
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 their normal behaviours and lifestyle. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that, we should do anything to live a longer and healthier life, so putting limitations and permissions to any test to word. Any kind of animal is the key point to organise
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 by sharing strict taxes with anyone who did not care about animal's lives.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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