Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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more and more activities
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international
corporations
, and
someone
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think that it is beneficial for
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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,
however
, others think that it can lead
some
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problems.
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, I would say that there are some plusses in two cases, but mostly I will hope first choice. It is obvious that nowadays is
era
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of a lot of opportunities.
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there are a lot of international
corporations
which increase the quantity of tourists and improve the economics of the country.
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,
in
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the
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last
year when Kazakhstan invited people for
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exhibition EXPO there came approximately 5 million tourists,
moreover
,
by
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statistics
of
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ministers the
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of the country
uplifted
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almost 2 times.
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, by holding
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of events, the countries can improve their
economics
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economies
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.
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, there are
also
humans who
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with
this
statement. In their
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opinion,
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this
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kinds of events can lead
so
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to
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serious problems
such
as
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from
sides
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the sides
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of tourists, and
increasing
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per cent
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percentage
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of
fightings
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fighting
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and so on. Statistics
of
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2021 year showed that in Indonesia
by
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increasing international
corporations
also
uplifted per cent of
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,
in addition
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of
this
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corporations
the war almost started there.
Therefore
in some
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cases
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case
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it can lead
some
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to some
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kinds of problems. In
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conclusion,
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there were two opinions, and in my opinion first opinion is more beneficial.
Furthermore
, improving
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the economy
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of
country
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the country
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is very useful.
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