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Exercise 1 - Task One Pineapple exports The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

Exercise 1 - Task One Pineapple exports The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
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The first pie chart depicts information about
pineapple
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exports
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 quantity from
top
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the top
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 three
pineapple
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-producing countries over a 10-year period, starting from 2009.
Second
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The second
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 graph illustrates data about the consumed amount of each
pineapple
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 in 2019.
overall
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 it can be seen that
the
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country
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 A exported most highest number of tonnes of
pineapple
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 than other countries.
Further
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, Distribution &
retail
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and retail
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 cost is higher than any other sector. Looking at the data sets in more detail, it is evident that the proportions of
pineapple
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 exports from
country
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 A and
country
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 C were 5 and 1 metric tonnes(
mt
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) in 2009,
whereas
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Country
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 B dispatched 4.2
mt
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.
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, in 2019 the figure for
country
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 A and C export quantity increased to 11
mt
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 and 2
mt
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. But
Country
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 B dropped dramatically to 0.8
mt
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 in 2019. Turning to the second pie chart data sets in more detail, it is shown that the Producer and Export costs consumed relatively lower than others, at around 5% and 4%. The cost of International transport, import licences, profit, and taxes consumption lies at 10% to 16%.
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 but not least, 35% cost by the distribution & retail.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country, mt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "sets" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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