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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities which are played alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals
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argue
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 that working as a group brings more benefits, especially essential skills, than that
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doing solely. in my opinion, I totally agree with
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 belief. on the one hand, solving problems alone could confer several principal
skillfulness
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such
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self regulation
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,
self reflection
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, and time management.
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completing the activities without help could enhance the
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discipline
 that people will set goals
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then
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and then
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 keep
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 mind to focus
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 their
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.
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also
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teach
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manage
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not to be distracted
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 and
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 all their attention to reaching their aims.
second,
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each
individuals
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 can improve
them
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self reflection
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.
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, after they find out and correct the mistake, they could improve the best outcome for that
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.
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, despite all the
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advantages
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 of working alone mentioned above, I think group projects have more positive benefits, which heighten our skills. to be more specific, students are given the chance to interact with their teammates, through that they can raise
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 voice , discuss ideas and give solutions for discussion,
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, children tend to learn the way how to listen to
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others
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 actively.
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Gradually
, their communication skill is enriched.
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 addition, from team activities, people can practice leadership by giving
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assign tasks
, which they need to consider
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 on
ability
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the ability
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 of each
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members
member
 that may develop both EQ and IQ
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 and the respect different
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 of the leader.
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, teamwork entirely reinforces problem-solving, critical thinking, and
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 conflicts ability. In conclusion, I personally believe that both group and individual activities have their own advantages, but that of team projects completely surpass the
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counterpart
,
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increase
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 more interpersonal skills in our life.

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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring that each paragraph flows naturally from one to the next. Use more transitional phrases to make the essay smoother.
coherence cohesion
Support main points with more specific examples or evidence to strengthen the argument. This will help make your reasoning clearer and more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and capitalization. Errors in these areas can distract from your ideas and make your writing less coherent.
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Expand on your ideas with greater depth and clarity. Provide more detailed explanations to make your arguments more comprehensive.
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Use relevant and specific examples to illustrate your points better. Examples make your essay more engaging and easier to understand.
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Work on clear topic sentences for each paragraph to better guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion that provide a solid framework for your essay.
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Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, showing a balanced approach.
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You provide a good range of skills that can be developed through both individual and team activities.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • leadership
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • belonging
  • learning from others
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivation
  • personal reflection
  • introspection
  • independence
  • self-reliance
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