The society is based on rules and laws. The society would not function well if individuals were free to do whatever they want. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often considered that
establishment
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of the
society
happened based on the
rules
and regulations and if the
rules
and
laws
are not present in the
society
and eventually citizens get
freedom
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to do anything
then
it would become chaos and it may lead to
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massive social unrest in the people. I completely agree that to create peace and discipline among the public implementing the
rules
and adherence to the
laws
are strictly followed. First of all, Individuals can get
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upper hand in
the
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society
if
civilian
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club does not want to follow the regulations set by the authorities. Social miscreants who want to create
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some sense of disturbance in
the
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society
they
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will not dare to commit a crime if the rule of law runs in the country.
Furthermore
, regulation of
the
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society
is crucial for not only
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progress but
also
for
it's
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development.
For example
, there are some countries in the world which
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without any
rules
and
laws
due to
this
they face severe consequences.
This
is the reason
to create
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for creating
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a conflictless
society
following
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the
rules
plays a major role.
Secondly
,
Although
there
are
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may be some
laws
which create conflicts in the public
due to
ideological differences between them.
Although
, freedom of expression and liberal rights are pivotal to the individual
but
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there should be
a
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reasonabale
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reasonable
restrictions on that. If there is no law, there is a fair chance that we can see a significant increase in the crime rate and
this
makes us
uncivilsied
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uncivilised
uncivilized
people.
Chance
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of happening atrocious,
barbarious
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barbarous
barbarians
, and horrendous crimes
will be
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high in uncivilised countries,
For instance
, Countries with
democratically
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the democratically
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elected government which follows
rules
as strictly as possible shows much growth compared which does not.
To conclude
,
Society
runs smoothly with
rules
and
laws
, without that functionality of the community will be at the brink of
collpase
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collapse
. As the public and authorities, following
of
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the the
rules
and regulations on
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a daily
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basis is so important.
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