The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966,1986 and 2006

The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966,1986 and 2006
The bar chart illustrates the age of Australian women as
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first-time
mom
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every 20 years from 1966 to 2006. There was a downward trend in the
giving
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birth percentage of women under 24 years old,
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there was an upward trend in
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figure
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25 above. It is notable that the group of 19 to 24 moms reached the highest in 1966,
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, the group of over 40
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the lowest percentage in 1986. In 1966, women between 19 to 24
year-old
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had the greatest percentage of giving birth to the first child, at approximately 62%. In 2006,
this
figure decreased by over 30%, which became the third highest among
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groups. The age between 30 and 34 rose significantly about 30%,
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the highest figure in 2006.
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the age of 25 to 30 fluctuated in
this
period but
overally
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overall
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, from 38% to nearly 40%, reaching its
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at 50% in 1986.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic changes
  • first-time mothers
  • age bracket
  • fertility rate
  • childbearing age
  • socioeconomic factors
  • educational attainment
  • healthcare advancements
  • family planning
  • societal norms
  • trend analysis
  • delaying motherhood
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