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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehical will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the next decades, there will be no need for drivers, since all vehicles will be autonomously driven. I adopt the stance that in
this
 manner
car
 accidents will gradually increase. On one hand,
automatic
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 driving
car
 has become a newly emerged trend that
aimed
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 to facilitate
human's
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 life.
In other words
,
traveling
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travelling
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 for prolonged periods ,without adequate sleeping hours, might lead to
loss
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in
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the
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concentration, which, in turn, can cause serious
car
 crashes, or even death.
This
 can be exemplified by an article published in
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Time Magazine which assumed that there is an annually increasing rate of mortality because of
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 accidents, and the prime cause is deficiency in focusing.
This
 example shows that driverless vehicles could have a pivotal role in enhancing the safety standards of driving.
On the other hand
, despite the
advantage
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 mentioned above, it can still be claimed that mechanic means of transportation do not have a conscious awareness of the
surrounding
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, and
this
 could lead to dire consequences. To illustrate, without fully understanding
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what is going on, these transportation means may not be able to
take
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 the correct decision in a crucial moment. A prime example of
this
 is
Tesla
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 driverless
car
, which placed many of its customers in a serious and
sever
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 situation because of inappropriate
descions
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decisions
 the
car
 sometimes made. What can be said here is that human consciousness is an important requirement to overcome
such
 challenges.
To sum up
,
after
this
 essay has reiterated the above-mentioned ideas, I am of the belief that
although
 technological advancement has a pivotal impact on our lives,
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 brain and capabilities remain critical for our survival.
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