Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

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the popularity of the newly invented social
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a rapidly accelerating pace. The first to become mainstream was Facebook but other platforms
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could have on individuals and society as a whole. On one hand, social
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people regardless of the physical distance between them and
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the exposure to culture and information from all over the globe that these platforms are able to provide us with, should not be underestimated.
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changed over time. If they used to be a tool to connect people, now their aim is mostly divisive, they implemented algorithms to maximise
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the revenue by tricking your brain into a state of addiction achieved by inducing the release of specific neurotransmitters.
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like Instagram, where the individual has the tendency to post only his best pictures/experiences, can cause a false sense of reality and
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that have been proven to be dangerous for the mental health of numerous users.
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like most phenomena are not inherently positive or negative, the approach the user has towards them is ultimately what really makes the difference.
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have a huge potential, they are evolving into refined machines for mass control and
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an increasing amount of care should be taken as we make use of them.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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