Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.
Since the early
2000s
the popularity of the newly invented social Add a comma
2000s,
media
started to grow with
a rapidly accelerating pace. The first to become mainstream was Facebook but other platforms Change preposition
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such
as Instagram and Twitter soon followed and with them, the concerns of people who were afraid of what negative effects these media
could have on individuals and society as a whole. On one hand, social media
were originally created with the aim to connect
people regardless of the physical distance between them and Change preposition
of connecting
this
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accomplished
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the exposure to culture and information from all over the globe that these platforms are able to provide us with, should not be underestimated. Add a comma
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On the other hand
, social media
have evolved and their purpose also
changed over time. If they used to be a tool to connect people, now their aim is mostly divisive, they implemented algorithms to maximise the
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hence
the revenue by tricking your brain into a state of addiction achieved by inducing the release of specific neurotransmitters. Moreover
, modern social media
like Instagram, where the individual has the tendency to post only his best pictures/experiences, can cause a false sense of reality and self comparisons
that have been proven to be dangerous for the mental health of numerous users. Add a hyphen
self-comparisons
Finally
, social media
like most phenomena are not inherently positive or negative, the approach the user has towards them is ultimately what really makes the difference. However
, even though these platform
have a huge potential, they are evolving into refined machines for mass control and Change the determiner
platforms
for
this
reason
an increasing amount of care should be taken as we make use of them.Add a comma
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion