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Training for work is far more important than providing a broad-based education. You should use your own ideas and experience and support your argument with examples.

In the modern world,
work
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 practice is more valuable than extensive education. Training can prepare the employee for a specific
role
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, but theoretical knowledge is equally important. On the one hand, many people think that
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 learning is the most important factor at
work
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 to success. But, the reality is that actual
work
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 needs someone to practice the specific
role
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.
For instance
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, My bachelor's degree was in Graphic
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. The courses they had taught me
Typography
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, Icon
Design
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, Logo
Design
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, Editorial, and Web
Design
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.
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, I had general information about every subject. But, when I started working at Bahrain TV, they needed me to
work
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 specifically as a Logo Designer for Television.
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, it took a lot of
work
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 to create a logo In other media and platforms, which made me have difficulty at first.
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, Bahrain TV gave me a training course at the organization to learn exactly what I do for my
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 type. On the flip side, theoretical knowledge is
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 as important as practical
work
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. Studying the theories before applying them in a real job is the best combination.
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, My sister studied Interior
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 for her bachelor's degree.
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 she went for an internship at the organization that she wanted to
work
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 with in the future. She
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 what she learned from the university a lot, which made her get the job that she loved as soon as she graduated from college.
To conclude
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, there is a connection between theoretical knowledge and practical
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. If the employee has those two components,
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 will result in having the best
work
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 quality in their
role
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 at the organization.

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