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Some people think that old buildings should be destroyed. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #buildings
These days a lot of
people
 think that old
buildings
 should be destroyed. In my opinion
the
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historic
buildings
 shouldn’t be built down
cause
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because
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 it’s have ban-fits
Firstly
, old
buildings
 have
historically
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 things.
In other
words
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 it’s
have
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beneficial for the
people
 and
also
 the con knows about
people
 in the past how
did
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they
live
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,
how
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and how
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did
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they
build
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built
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 it.
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, many
of
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countries have historical
buildings
such
 as
those
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castles,
buildings
 , churches, gates and
other
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others
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It
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 makes them monumental works.the government should protect these
buildings
 as well because it
something
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in
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valuable.
Secondly
, those
buildings
 can be them teach
people
 about
the
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past life and
the
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old cultures.we have to learn how did they
survives
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 in the past, learn from their mistakes and we don’t fall
in
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into
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 the same mistakes.
For instance
, old
buildings
 shouldn’t tear down whatever the purpose
it
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they
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 must be protected , restored and guarded.
For example
, the same what happened in Europe
the
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they
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 destroyed old houses to build new high
buildings
 and the culture disappeared.if they pull down the old
buildings
 it will destroy ancient civilizations. In conclusion, the historical
place
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places
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have to
protect
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be protected
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them
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by the government and organizations. If they don’t pull down they can teach the new generation
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