Some say you should always marry for love; other say that in an uncertain world it wiser to marry for money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Finding
a
real Remove the article
apply
love
is one of the things people are dreaming
about, Wrong verb form
dream
however
, in an uncertain world
some argue that it is wiser to get married for Add a comma
world,
money
. In my opinion, money
can't buy happiness and marriage should be created out of love
. This
essay will further
develop both opinions.
It is true, that coping with different economic problems that may arise in the
world filled with instability, is easier Correct article usage
a
together with
a partner. Furthermore
, I do understand that with money
comes sense
of security and economic stability Add an article
a sense
following
by higher social status when marrying purely out of Wrong verb form
followed
money
. I do, however
, strongly believe that it is not that easy to build trust or deep
and healthy relationship with a partnerCorrect article usage
a deep
,
since all a person cares about is Remove the comma
apply
money
. The one in a marriage with higher
income can be seen and valued purely based on his achievements. Correct article usage
a higher
This
can create tention
and develop reasons to argue, which eventually lead to divorces.
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tension
Although
finding a romantic partner with whom to create a family is, indeed, very difficult, it can result in happy
and long-lasting relationship. When people Add an article
a happy
fell
in Wrong verb form
fall
love
, they learn to communicate to
each other on a deeper level and Change preposition
with
usually
Add a comma
usually,
these kind
of partners share Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
same
values and goals for life. Correct article usage
the same
Therefore
, in the marriage
Add a comma
marriage,
there's
fewer Wrong verb form
there are
misundertandings
and arguments, which Correct your spelling
misunderstandings
result
in happier families. When it comes to Correct subject-verb agreement
results
money
, at times it can be financially hard, but having
common goals, both working partners can deal with problems together and deepen their trust and respect for each other, when overcoming all the hardships they may face.
Change preposition
by having
To conclude
, although
some people choose marrying
purely for Change the verb form
to marry
money
, which may create sense
of security, I do not believe Add an article
a sense
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
these kind
of marriages Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
last
for long. Finding someone with similar values in life and creating a family out of love
results in happiness and long-lasting relationships.Submitted by katja.otavina on
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