Many people use distance-learning programmes (study material post, TV, Internet, etc.) to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending colledge or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Distance learning is a relatively recent phenomenon and
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it is somewhat controversial. With good reason, many people
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whether technology can really change how we can learn. Others,
however
, make a convincing argument that classroom-based learning has its limitations. Considering both sides,
it is clear that
there is value in both approaches. Let us first consider the pros of traditional, classroom-based learning. From the time of the ancient Greeks and Chinese and perhaps before, we have clung to the idea of a "teacher;" one who
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his/her wisdom and expertise.
This
model has been tested and survived the ages. Teachers not only can share knowledge, but they can assess, correct and motivate
students
. Truly there is great value in
this
. That said, remote learning
also
has its own upside. Consider,
for example
,
students
who live in remote areas or funds to pay for tuition to attend a school far away...an Internet connection solves
this
.
Also
, there is something to be said
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students
being more independent learners, and online learning develops
this
skill. So the question really is not "Which one?" but rather, "How we can combine both?"It seems perfectly reasonable that
students
attend some classes in person, but
also
use the web to communicate with other
students
and professors
as well as
research various topics. Countries and societies need to assess which approach and balance works best for them. So
while
we should harness the potential of new technology that makes remote learning possible, we should not neglect the importance of traditional learning.
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without teachers will surely be lost
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but
students
who simply rely on teachers for knowledge are not really learning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distance learning
  • study material
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • access
  • resources
  • learn at one's own pace
  • cost effectiveness
  • face-to-face interaction
  • socialization
  • practical learning
  • traditional education
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