the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.

the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.
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The bar chart presents the percentage of survey results about the top five Australian cities society and tea buying and drinking habits.
This
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information is going to be analyzed based on the people who bought fresh and instant
coffee
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and
also
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went to a cafe for tea in the
last
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4 weeks.
Overall
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, Melbourne and Hobart have the highest rate of inhabitants who go to a cafe to enjoy some drinks.
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, Brisban and Adelaide have the lowest percentage of visitors who bought fresh
coffee
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. On one hand, in Melbourne, there are few people who buy fresh and quick-ready
coffee
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which is only approximately 42% and 47%.
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, the average of those kinds is 44,5%.
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, Hobart is just the same as Melbourne, but higher in instant
coffee
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and lower in fresh
coffee
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buyers, which increased and decreased around 6% and 4% respectively.
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, in Adelaide, the biggest buyer in the city is instant drinks, unlike the other cities, the people who went to a cafe have the lowest percentage, which is 38%.
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