. Should celebrities give up the right to privacy?

Nowadays,
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entertainment industry is developing rapidly and credit goes to the
media
. Some
people
believe that famous personalities
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earing
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based on
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public
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and they do not have
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to complain
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that the public is violating their
privacy
.
Whereas
, my opinion contradicts the given statement. In the following paragraphs, the reason supporting my idea will be discussed in detail. Apparently,
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conviction
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everyone has
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right
of
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privacy
and celebrities are not an exception here. Without the light of the stage they are
also
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normal
people
like all of us and they have
right
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to enjoy their private life.
As a
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if they do not want to share their relationships or any other personal aspect of their lives
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then
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people
need to respect their decision.
For example
, when famous actress
Anuska
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Anushka
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social
media
that they
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not ready to make her baby's public appearance until she
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at
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certain
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level of age.some
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media
organisations
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supported them and respected their
privacy
. Other than
this
, It is inevitable that social
media
has a negative impact on
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famous
people
. With the eye of
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they need to be very careful in the course of what they are doing, who they are meeting, who they are dating and even what they are eating which is totally unfair.
they
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are not an animal in
zoo
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the zoo
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and folks do not have
right
to control them.
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Moreover
, they
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most of their time in
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as well
as
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they are role models for many. They can be
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by work just like us or even more.
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, they
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to be happy with their loved ones on vacation or on weekends without any
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from
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media
. In conclusion, It is normal to get
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attention
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well-known personalities but they
also
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some
along
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time with their private lives without constant
intriduing
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intervention
by
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the mass-media
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mass-
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mass media
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media
. If
people
will respect their
privacy
they
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be happy to live their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebrities
  • privacy
  • media intrusion
  • negative consequences
  • responsibility
  • role models
  • sacrifice
  • balancing
  • public's right to know
  • complex issue
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