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Nodaway tourism has show great impact on society. Do you agree or disagree.

#nodaway #tourism #show #impact #society
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contemporary
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era
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 thattourism had
been
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show great impact on society . I
agree
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this
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 statement and my view here
Firsty
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Firstly
, tourism has
great
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a great
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 impact on
everycountry
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every country
 economy
beacuse
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because
where
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when
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foriegners
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foreigners
are come
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come
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 to see their tourist
place
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 they spend money to buy many things .
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 , some
tourism
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tourist
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place
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places
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 like
a
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jaipur
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 there is many historical
builiding
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building
buildings
 and every year
lot
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a lot
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 of people visit these
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place
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places
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 to see there  Building and when they
saw
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see
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 these
building
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buildings
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 buy some tickets .
These money
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spend
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is spent
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 on
building
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buildings
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 by
government
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 .
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 if they another countries individuals come
their
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 country
than
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then
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 they expand their culture
one
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place
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 to another
place
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 and it is
big
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 our culture .
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job creation
  • Economic stimulus
  • Infrastructure development
  • Cultural exchange
  • Commercialization of culture
  • Environmental degradation
  • Conservation awareness
  • Social displacement
  • Cost of living increase
  • Service improvements
  • Seasonal fluctuations
  • Dependence on tourism
  • Authenticity preservation
  • International understanding
  • Cultural dilution
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