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Nodaway tourism has show great impact on society. Do you agree or disagree.

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Introduction
In
contemporary
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the contemporary
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era
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era,
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 thattourism had
been
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show great impact on society . I
agree
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agree on
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this
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 statement and my view here
Body paragraph 1
Firsty
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Firstly
, tourism has
great
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a great
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 impact on
everycountry
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every country
 economy
beacuse
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because
where
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when
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foriegners
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foreigners
are come
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come
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 to see their tourist
place
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 they spend money to buy many things .
Moreover
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 , some
tourism
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tourist
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place
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places
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 like
a
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apply
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jaipur
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Jaipur
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 there is many historical
builiding
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building
buildings
 and every year
lot
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a lot
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 of people visit these
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place
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places
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 to see there
Body paragraph 2
Building and when they
saw
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see
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 these
building
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buildings
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 buy some tickets .
These money
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This money
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spend
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is spent
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 on
building
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buildings
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 by
government
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the government
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 .
Conclusion
Moreover
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 if they another countries individuals come
their
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to their
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 country
than
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then
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 they expand their culture
one
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from one
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place
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 to another
place
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 and it is
big
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a big
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 way
exploure
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 our culture .

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position whether you agree or disagree in the introduction.
task achievement
Provide more comprehensive ideas and develop your arguments with more supporting details.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a logical progression of ideas and maintain a consistent structure throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion to properly structure your essay.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples and provide more details to support your arguments.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job creation
  • Economic stimulus
  • Infrastructure development
  • Cultural exchange
  • Commercialization of culture
  • Environmental degradation
  • Conservation awareness
  • Social displacement
  • Cost of living increase
  • Service improvements
  • Seasonal fluctuations
  • Dependence on tourism
  • Authenticity preservation
  • International understanding
  • Cultural dilution
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