The table below gives an information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries

The table shows data about the proportion of income people spent on three groups of products in (within) five countries in 2002.

Overall

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, the first group of grocery products predominates over the rest. Clothing/footwear is the

second

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largest category of spending (

akes

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the

second

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place),

while

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(

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) leisure/spare time and educational needs are the least essential/important/popular. Turkey’s consumers/Turks spend the largest percentage of income/earnings/revenues/ (capital) on all three groups

ofgoods

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of goods

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Sweden

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the

overall

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proportion of spending is the smallest. Turkey and Ireland’s

groceries

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grocery

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expenses are the largest of all, comprising 32.14% and 28.91% respectively (and are the largest in the first group).

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, these two countries have really close figures of spending on clothes and footwear at around 6.5% ( 6.63% and 6.43%)( in the

second

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column.

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, people in Turkey spend almost twice as high a percentage of their earnings (4.35%) on entertainment and education as in Ireland

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Italy,

Sweden

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and Spain

demostrate

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demonstrate

similar/close figures in the food category/ sectors, spending

one fifth

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( and almost

two tenths

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) of income (is spent for) on it.

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, only Italy and

Sweden

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show practically the same proportion of spending at just over 3%/ 3.20% and 3.22% respectively. Despite

such

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similarities, Italy has the largest/highest( biggest) figure at (

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) 9% in the

second

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group,

whereas

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spending in

Sweden

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comprises the smallest 5.40%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words second, sweden with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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223 words

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