The table below gives an information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries

The table below gives an information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries
The table shows data about the proportion of income people spent on three groups of products in (within) five countries in 2002.
Overall
, the first group of grocery products predominates over the rest. Clothing/footwear is the
second
largest category of spending (
akes
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the
second
place),
while
(
and
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) leisure/spare time and educational needs are the least essential/important/popular. Turkey’s consumers/Turks spend the largest percentage of income/earnings/revenues/ (capital) on all three groups
ofgoods
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of goods
,
whereas
in
Sweden
the
overall
proportion of spending is the smallest. Turkey and Ireland’s
groceries
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grocery
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expenses are the largest of all, comprising 32.14% and 28.91% respectively (and are the largest in the first group).
Moreover
, these two countries have really close figures of spending on clothes and footwear at around 6.5% ( 6.63% and 6.43%)( in the
second
column.
However
, people in Turkey spend almost twice as high a percentage of their earnings (4.35%) on entertainment and education as in Ireland
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Italy,
Sweden
and Spain
demostrate
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demonstrate
similar/close figures in the food category/ sectors, spending
one fifth
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( and almost
two tenths
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two-tenths
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) of income (is spent for) on it.
However
, only Italy and
Sweden
show practically the same proportion of spending at just over 3%/ 3.20% and 3.22% respectively. Despite
such
similarities, Italy has the largest/highest( biggest) figure at (
of
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) 9% in the
second
group,
whereas
spending in
Sweden
comprises the smallest 5.40%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall, whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words second, sweden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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