Public libraries will soon no longer be housed in a building as all facilities and books will be available online for all to access. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of public libraries to existing online?

It is thought by some people that
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will be replaced by an online version which would be available for all to use. Having digital access, would save hours and it would be easily
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accessed,
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it would be limited to the people having internet access. One evident benefit of having
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library is that it saves hours. If the hub of knowledge is available at one click, it would be accessible to people no matter
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is day or night. It would save not only travelling time but
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save books from the factor of wear and tear.
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, if the volumes are present
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comfort zone, it would save the readers from standing in the
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line as multiple users can download or purchase the book at
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time. With everything
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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