Mr.benjamin is a 63 year old patient in care well hospital where you are acting as a charge nurse

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I am writing to refer Mr.
benjamin
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Benjamin

The word benjamin should be capitalized in this context.

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who has undergone total hip replacement surgery.He
requries
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requires

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continue
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continued

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care and management .Now he is
being
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apply

The verb being appears to be unnecessary here.

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ready to discharge your care. Mr.
benjamin
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Benjamin

The word benjamin should be capitalized in this context.

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was admitted to our facility on 5
september
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September

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2009.He
was
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had

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undergone total hip replacement without any complication .
Post operatively
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Postoperatively

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,his
droppedto
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dropped to
dropped

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71 for that 3 units RBC transfused .Now his hb
in
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is in

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normal
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the normal
a normal

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range.During
recovery
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the recovery

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period
strecting
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stretching

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exercise
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exercises

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given
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are given

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by physiotherapy.
Currently
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Currently,

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he is able to walk perfectly with
wheelie
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a wheelie

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walker. mr.
benjamin
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Benjamin

The word benjamin should be capitalized in this context.

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was a widower and lived in
abrina
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Abrina

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nursing home for
past
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the past

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2 years.He
was quited
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quit

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his accountant job at the age of 60.On observation ,he has no sign of dementia .He has
history
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a history

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of osteoarthritis and blood pressure. I would highly appreciate
,
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apply

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if
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it if

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you could assist his mobility with equipment .Kindly help him to follow
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the

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drug regime.Encourage him to do
recommended
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the recommended

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exercise to improve his mobility.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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