Many wild birds and animals live in towns and cities. Some people think that the wildlife should be protected. Some think that they should be removed. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Urban life is relatively a modern phenomenon compared to
the
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human existence on
the
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Earth.
Cities
accommodate various breeds of
animals
and birds,
along with
being the cradle of human life. A
group
of people argue that they
shall
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be preserved,
while
others believe that it is best to eliminate
the
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urban
wildlife
. Both sides have strong arguments and I strongly side with preservation but under full control of authorities. One of the most important reasons
of
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the pro-elimination
group
is human well-being and
health
. Wild
animals
and birds cause
spreading
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the spreading
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of infections or diseases that are mutual between human and their breed. Rodents,
for instance
,
cause
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the widespread
of
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plague all across the European regions
some-hundred
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years ago, and people had to miserably remove them from their habitats. In
this
regard, the
city-dwellers'
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city-dwellers
health
is
under
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at
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a serious risk of
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infectious. Those who advocate the
presence
of
animals
in urban areas,
on the other hand
, have various reasons, namely moral issues, or keeping biodiversity in
favor
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of preserving
the
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nature. For many, it is morally wrong to kill or harm other living creatures. They think that they have the right to live as much as
us
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humans do.
Furthermore
, there are a large
group
of people who
understands
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the
importace
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importance
of keeping
wildlife
in the
cities
. In fact, a healthy cycle of
wildlife
in urban regions promotes
the
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health
. Take cats as an example; if they were preserved well and present in the course of
European
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plague outburst, rodents would have had
the
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a
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lower chance of spreading the microbe. So,
pro-preservation
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the pro-preservation
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group
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groups
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strongly recommend
to keep
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keeping
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animals
in the city. Frankly, I prefer keeping the
wild life
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wildlife
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in the
cities
, near ourselves
,
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but
control
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their
presence
. It is important to keep an eye on the number of each species and control their
health
status. Many
cities
,
for
example
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Istanbul, have
health
programs for their urban dogs.
Such
cities
make sure dogs are vaccinated or the number of wild mice in the city is limited
,
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so that they can not harm human lives. Urban
wildlife
is an inseparable part of
cities
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the city's
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environment, so it is vital to take action against or for their
presence
. Both campaigns have great ideas, but I think a controlled version of keeping
animals
presence
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present
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is the best way to answer
moral
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morals
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, keeping biodiversity, and
health
issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial roles in local ecosystems
  • controlling insect populations
  • acting as pollinators
  • aesthetic and recreational value
  • quality of life
  • educational opportunities
  • maintain biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • resilience against environmental changes
  • health risks
  • spread of diseases
  • aggressive encounters
  • endanger humans and pets
  • property damage
  • nesting in buildings
  • scavenging through garbage
  • maintenance costs
  • suitable habitats
  • suffering and poor welfare
  • relocating them to more natural settings
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