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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2006 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2006 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two
map
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maps
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 give information about the development of a university
campus
 from 2006 to the present. Generally,
it is clear that
 the
campus
 areas have
been
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experienced major changes. Most noticeably, there were increases in accommodation.
To begin
 with, the student accommodation which is located in the west of the
campus
 has been expanded with more buildings.
In addition
, shops and restaurant which were in the South-Eastern corner of the map have moved to the South-Western corner of the
campus
 and has been made into student facilities which include shops, offices and more.
Then
, the accommodation building which
locate
Wrong verb form
is located
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 to the South-Western of the lake has been relocated into the South-Western and has occupied two shops and
the
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a
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 restaurant.
On the other hand
, the lawn and seating area which located be located around the lake
has been
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are
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 no longer there and more trees have been chopped down for more free land.
Moreover
, the teaching block which teaches science and arts has been separated into two
building
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buildings
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such
 as
arts
Correct article usage
the arts
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 building and
science
Correct article usage
the science
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 building. Specifically, the university offices
has
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have
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 been knocked down and
has been
Verb problem
apply
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converted into M:
the
Correct word choice
and the
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 science building and the old teaching block
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 been turned into knocked down to make way for
arts
Correct article usage
the arts
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 building.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words campus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "knocked down" was used 2 times.
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