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One of your penfriends wants to improve his/her English in advance of moving to Sydney. Write a letter to your penfriend. Advise him/her about the following: listening skills, speaking skills and vocabulary. You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

#penfriends #english #advance #sydney #penfriend #skills #vocabulary #address
Dear Kelly, How are you? Hopefully, you're doing well these days. I'm writing
this
 email to reply to your
requested
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 from
last
 week. I've looked at the email and
you're mention
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 you'd like to improve and enhance your
English
 ability before you move to Sydney. About
that
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 I definitely can help you to increase your language capacity. The most important thing to advance the
English
 level is to analyze into four parts which are listening, reading, writing and speaking
then
 to understand these elements you'd be expressive like a local
people
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.
Firstly
, reading, writing and vocabulary skills, there
have
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 different
type
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 of apps on the website and portable devices you
could
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 practice at any location. But I'd recommend you to
dowload
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download
this
 app
call
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 'TS
English
',
this
 application
support
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 all types of software and it's
also
 free courses so you don't need to worry about the money or the monthly costs.
However
, other two parts
such
 as speaking and listening skills, you can practice with me without a doubt. We'll
using
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English
 to
adpot
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adopt
adapt
 a comfort zone but before
that
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 we have to stipulate
ourself
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 and make some rules when are communicate with each other. I'll
also
 give you my timetable so you can decide when you'd like to book it and I'll lock the day for you. I'm looking forward to
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 from you. Best wishes, William Noot
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coherence cohesion
Organize the letter into paragraphs to improve coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Provide a more suitable greeting and closing for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Focus on each point (listening skills, speaking skills, vocabulary) in separate paragraphs.
task achievement
Provide more specific advice on how to improve listening skills, speaking skills, and vocabulary.
task achievement
Use more formal language and avoid contractions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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