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The COP is a gathering of
countries
 that aim to prevent
climate
change
 by drafting briefs and policies that are appropriate to the present. The implementation of the COP is very important considering that the earth is currently experiencing a
climate
 crisis where recently there have been many phenomena
such
 as drought, ENSO, etc.
This
 has disrupted the balance of
countries
 in supplying food sources for the community, so every
year
this
 meeting is held.
This
 has disrupted the balance of
countries
 in supplying food sources for the community so that every
year
this
 meeting is held.
Climate
change
 is a phenomenon in which the Earth experiences long-term changes in temperature.
This
 phenomenon occurs
due to
 continuous anthropogenic activity that traps the sun's heat and causes the greenhouse effect. Various kinds of modelling to see what will happen in 2050, 2100, or whenever has been done and the result is that
climate
change
 will continue to occur and temperatures will increase exponentially from
year
 to
year
.
This
 is quite dangerous considering that humanity has a threshold in addressing
climate
change
 with an agreement that
countries
 will limit the earth's temperature to 2 degrees Celsius, with efforts to not exceed 1.5 first. The sector most affected by
climate
change
 is the economic sector.
This
 sector is vital as people have lower purchasing power these days
due to
climate
change
. Decreased production in the agriculture, marine, livestock and forestry sectors is linked to air temperature, rainfall and other
climate
 variability. If production drops, there will be no income, making it difficult for people to fulfil their needs
due to
 an unstable economy.
This
 is quite dangerous and can lead to massive inflation in various
countries
 so that people will live in poverty.
Therefore
, the economic factor is certainly one that will be greatly affected by
climate
change
.
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