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The graph below shows the qatari import totals( in tons) for several types of vegetables from 1980 to 2020. The pie charts depict the total value of imports in Qatar for five varieties of vegetables for 3 distinct years from 1980 to 2020. Units are denoted in tones.

The graph below shows the qatari import totals( in tons) for several types of vegetables from 1980 to 2020. The pie charts depict the total value of imports in Qatar for five varieties of vegetables for 3 distinct years from 1980 to 2020. Units are denoted in tones.
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The presented pie charts refer to all vegetable imports in
the
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Qatari, which include
Spinach
, Broccoli, Garlic, Peas, and Ginger vegetables from 1980 to 2020.
Overall
, the
Spinach
 has the
most
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highest
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 levels of imports among others.
While
 the peas devoted
the
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less amount of that treat. Indeed, the popular and
over use
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 vegetable was the
Spinach
 for individuals’ Qatari. As observed in the details, it is said that
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 of the
Spinach
 reduced approximately 150
tonnes
 in 2020.
On the other hand
, the import of
the
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Garlic had a
raise
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rise
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about
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 100
tonnes
 from 1980 to 2020.
In addition
,
in
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the case of Broccoli showed the same trend.
Moreover
, Peas’s imports did not
significant
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 change during the mentioned years, and it took the lower level in
this
 survey, which was below 200
tonnes
. The Ginger had a mean and stable amount
between
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 others and it entered about 300
tonnes
 on a yearly basis.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words spinach, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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