the table shows the proportions of pupil attending four secondary school types
The table illustrates the
ratio
of student
attending Fix the agreement mistake
students
of
four second-degree school categories in a country from 2000 to 2009.
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Overall
, the attendance ratio
of specialist schools
was the least
by far in the period of nine years. Correct word choice
lowest
While
community schools
exhibited an upward trend, the remaining three schools
decreased over time. Eventually, voluntary-controlled schools
experienced the most significant drop throughout the period.
Community and specialist schools
had the
attendance Correct article usage
an
ratio
of 12% in 2000. After that specialist schools
demonstrated only a slight drop of 2% untill
2009. Correct your spelling
until
On the other hand
, community schools
increased to 32% before escalating to 58% in 2009. Which was the highest join ratio
of lectures for a school type from 2000 to 2009.
While
grammar schools
had 24
% attendance Correct article usage
a 24
ratio
, more than a
half of Correct article usage
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students
of voluntary-controlled Correct article usage
the students
schools
attended their classes in 2000. After that it saw a noticable
drop of 14%, before hitting the bottom of 20% in 2009. The Correct your spelling
noticeable
enterance
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entrance
ratio
of classes for grammer
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grammar
schools
slowly decreased to 12% at the end
of 2009.Submitted by historicalpen on
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