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In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their healthy. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this option. Give reasons for your anser and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that in numerous countries the eating
habits
 and
lifestyles
 of young generations are different
of
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from
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 past generations. It seems to some
people
 that
this
 has had a negative result on their bodies. First of all, I strongly believe that having different
habits
 and
lifestyles
 is really bad for children. In my
opinion
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 children have to eat organic foods and they have to above from junk food and fast food. Research shows that if anyone does not particularly sleep enough and does not eat well that time
this
 person can be more easily ill than others who have a good lifestyle. Because having bad daily routines and
lifestyles
 can decrease our body power or our immune system and
as a consequence
, it can make us really weak.
Secondly
, In my experience,
people
 have to obey some
rules
 and
above
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some warnings to be happy and healthy. In order to do that first of all
people
 should be disciplined.
On the contrary
, when
people
 are not living as disciplined
people
this
 process can impact their entire life and
as a result
, they can not be healthy. There is no denying that most successful
people
 had their own
rules
 and even all of them were disciplined.
However
, having different or not stable
lifestyles
 and eating
habits
 means that
this
 person is not disciplined. To summarise, Personally, I think that to live happily and
healthy
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healthily
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people
 have to obey some
rules
. In order to start obeying
rules
 they have to make disciplined eating
habits
 and
lifestyles
.
Otherwise
,
this
 is able to affect their life in a negative side.
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