The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to1983. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The provided table depicts the proportions of the household goods owned by British citizens over the period of 1972 to 1983.

Overall

, what stands out most from the graph is that there has been an upward trend in the

ownerships

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ownership

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of all the consumer goods in British

household

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households

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throught

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through

throughout

the given period. The popularity of television, refrigerator and

vaccum

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vacuum

cleaner

have

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been

all time

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high,

where as

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video and dishwasher were the least popular as these were introduced late.

Along with

that, other durables

also

saw a significant rise over the years. In detail, the ownership of TV, fridge and

vaccum

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vacuum

cleaner was 93%, 73% and 87%

recpectively

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respectively

, in 1972.

This

proportion jumped to 98% for the TV and 94% for the refrigerator in 1983.

Whereas

, for the

vaccum

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vacuum

cleaner no data is given for the year 1983,

however

, 95%

Britishers

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of Britishers

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owned it in 1982. In 1972,

onwers

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owners

of other contraptions like central heating

system

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systems

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(37%),

telephone

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telephones

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(42%) and washing

machine

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machines

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(66%) were not that many in Britain.

Washing

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The washing

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machine was far more popular than

the

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apply

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telephone and heaters in 1983 which accounted for 94% compared to the other two i.e. 64% and 77%

corespondingly

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correspondingly

. Video system was introduced in 1983 and 18%

residents

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of residents

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had it.

Furthermore

, only 3%

citizens

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of citizens

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owned

dishwasher

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dishwashers

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in 1978 when

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they

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arrived in the market and

its

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their

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popularity

inclined

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increased

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gradually to 5% in 1983.

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