In many countries around the world , rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
People
always try do
relocate Correct your spelling
to
in
the best place where they can have better standards of living. Change preposition
to
This
development might be negative for both cities and countryside
. Correct article usage
the countryside
In
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This
this
essay will be discussed disadvantages
of the trend Correct article usage
the disadvantages
such
as congestion
of urban infrastructure and Correct article usage
the congestion
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the redusinig
redusinig
agricultural Correct your spelling
reducing
sector
of economy
.
Undoubtedly Add an article
the economy
that
cities provide more Correct word choice
apply
oportunities
for their dwellers Correct your spelling
opportunities
for
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to
istance
quality education, healthcare system, Correct your spelling
improve
entertainment
. Correct word choice
and entertainment
As a
result
majority Add a comma
result,
young
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of young
people
move to teh
city. Correct your spelling
the
the
influx of rural residents creates Capitalize word
The
a
significant congestion on public transport facilities. Public transport becomes overcrowded not only during rush hours but Remove the article
apply
all
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at all
time
. In order to Fix the agreement mistake
times
decide
Verb problem
solve
this
problem the government has to increase the number
of buses, trams
. Correct word choice
and trams
This
will requirw
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require
finincial
investments. Correct your spelling
financial
Also
the Add a comma
Also,
number
of cars on the roads considerably grow
. It leads to traffic jams.
Energy systems are Correct subject-verb agreement
grows
also
designed for a certain number
of people
. If the population of cities grow, energy systems have to be strengten
.
What is more , Correct your spelling
strengthen
decreasing
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a decrease
number
of Correct article usage
the number
people
in the
rural areas can lead to Correct article usage
apply
reducting
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a reducting
financial
support from the government and Change preposition
in financial
as a result
to disappearance of rural areas. Usually countryside provides agricultural
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the agricultural
sector
of country
. It's Add an article
the country
very
essential for each country Rephrase
apply
has
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to have
developed
agricultural Correct article usage
a developed
sector
whis
produces many types of Correct your spelling
that
product
for Fix the agreement mistake
products
population
. Shortage of workforce might be a cause of serious problems in Add an article
the population
agricultural
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the agricultural
sector
too.
In conclusion
the decrease Add a comma
conclusion,
of
rural population is a serious problem for any country Change preposition
in
firstly
because it van be
cause Wrong verb form
can
of
dramatical negative changes in Change preposition
apply
agricultural
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the agricultural
sector
, also
it mught
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might
be
require substantial financial investments in support of Unnecessary verb
apply
robust
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the robust
of
city.Change preposition
apply
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