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Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement?What influnces people when they buy food?

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In recent times, the majority of
people
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 across the world focus on the
price
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 of goods
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 as
foods
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instead
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 of their quality. I totally agree with
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 opinion for several reasons.     It's true that every family try to save their money
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 their financial state .
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 is because, their monthly salaries are spent for various purposes like clothing,
food
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 and rents.
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 means that
,
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 the
price
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 of meals is essential for the households. Some
people
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 decide to eat instant noodles too much because it's cheaper and easy to cook.
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, families do not pay attention to the quality of
food
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 ingredients which will have a huge impact on their well-being  in the future.
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 others choose to cook by themselves because the
price
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 of ingredients is more reasonable
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than ordering
foods
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 remotely.       The
price
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 of
food
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 is not
a
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the
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only factor which
people
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 consider
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 they are purchasing meals.
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,  reasonable prices of
food
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 products can have an effect on
costumers
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customers
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, advertisements and attractive packaging are other important factors. For the most part,
costumers
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customers
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 decide to buy goods in terms of popular advertisements on TV or social media.
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 is because
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 most
people
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 have an interest towards trendy things.
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,
food
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  factories have a strong sense of responsibility to package
foods
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 properly.
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,
costumers
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customers
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prefer to buy eye-catching
food
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 products.     In conclusion, I do believe that  even though the process of making
foods
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are
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is
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 critical
especially
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, especially
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on
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 human health, a lot of
people
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 neglect it
due to
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 economic reasons or
as a result
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 of advertisements.

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