The maps below represent the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps below represent the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The maps below represent the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. In 1990, the town was a much greener residential area with immeasurable trees and individual houses,
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during the next 15
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Templeton experienced tragic changes. The most apparent is that nineteen woods
chopped
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down to three. Specific houses by the seaside had
replaced
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by
block houses
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blockhouses
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and several ones were cut down to construct a railway station.
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, a new industrial estate with
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a factory
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and supermarket sprang up around the school, hospital, airport and
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railway station.
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,
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developments were the manufacture of the airport near the
north-east
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northeast
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. A new stretch of railway from the seaside
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directly west. The latest thing, a ferry was
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established at the mouth of the sea.
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a largely rural to a mainly metropolis.
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