Some people say cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others say this is the only way to save such traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people believe that cultural
traditions
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will disappear if they are used for money-making purposes,
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others believe
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is the only
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to preserve
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traditions
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. Personally, I agree that charging for cultural
traditions
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is an effective
way
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to maintain the cultural heritage but it is not the only solution. On the one hand, there is a reason why charging for
traditions
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and cultural heritage can lead to the loss of local
traditions
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and customs. Cultural
traditions
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are priceless and turning these
traditions
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into tourism purposes seems to reduce the preciousness of local
traditions
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.
For example
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, there are some temples that are supposed to be sacred places because they connect the gods and ordinary people are turning to famous tourist attractions and visitors have to pay entrance ticket fees to get into them.
This
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inevitably makes the religious and sacred destinations mundane places like any other tourist destination,
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visitors do not comprehensively understand the meaning and importance of
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traditions
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.
As a result
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, these religious
traditions
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will soon be eliminated.
On the other hand
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, I believe charging for cultural
traditions
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can be an effective
way
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to maintain
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traditions
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.
This
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is because there are some
traditions
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that require a huge amount of money to maintain.
For instance
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, jugglery is a Vietnamese cultural heritage that requires the frequent replacement of equipment, and
therefore
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once jugglery does not receive financial resources, it can disappear.
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, I believe there are numerous ways out there to maintain cultural
traditions
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, one of which is financial assistance from the government. If governments allocate part of the state budget to provide equipment and upgrade traditional facilities, not only are culture and
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preserved but
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a huge influx of tourists are attracted to the country,
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boosting the country’s economy. In conclusion,
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traditions
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can be destroyed if they are used for money-making purposes, I believe it can be a great
way
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to preserve cultural
traditions
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because some
traditions
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need financial resources to maintain.
However
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,
this
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is not the only
way
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to maintain traditional values as the government can
also
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take responsibility by providing financial assistance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Dilution of cultural traditions
  • Authenticity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Revenue
  • Financial support
  • Preservation
  • Promotion
  • Commodification of culture
  • Intrinsic value
  • Exposure
  • Global awareness
  • Respect and understanding
  • Economic gain
  • Local communities
  • Decision-making processes
  • Respectful portrayal
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